Write an Email Test #215
Write an Email
TOEFL iBT / Writing / Write an Email Video Solution (Tips & Tricks)
You will read some information and use the information to write an email.
You will have 7 minutes to write the email.
The city recently installed new bicycle racks near the public library. However, the location is inconvenient and blocks a walkway. You want to write to the city's public works department to suggest a better location.
Write an email to the Public Works Department. In your email, do the following.
- • Thank the department for installing the new racks.
- • Describe the problem with the current location.
- • Suggest a more suitable location for the racks.
Write as much as you can and in complete sentences.
Your Response:
To : [email protected]
Subject : Issue with New Bicycle Racks
Sample Score 5
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my sincere appreciation for the recent installation of the new bicycle racks near the public library.|This is a welcome addition for cyclists in our community, and your efforts to promote sustainable transportation are commendable.
While the racks are a fantastic resource, I have noticed a significant issue with their current placement.|They are positioned directly on the primary walkway leading to the library's main entrance, which unfortunately obstructs pedestrian flow and creates a potential safety hazard, particularly for individuals with strollers or mobility aids.|I would like to respectfully suggest an alternative location.|There appears to be an ideal, underutilized space along the brick wall to the east of the entrance.|Relocating the racks there would resolve the obstruction issue while keeping them conveniently accessible for library patrons.|Thank you for your time and consideration of this matter.|Sincerely,
[Your Name]
Sample Score 4
Dear Public Works Department,
First, I would like to thank you for installing the new bicycle racks near our public library.|This is a very helpful addition for people who ride their bikes.|Unfortunately, I have noticed an issue with where the racks have been placed.|They are currently located on the main walkway, which blocks the path and makes it difficult for people to get to the entrance.
I would like to suggest moving them to a more suitable location.|There is some empty space on the side of the building that would be perfect.|This would keep the walkway clear for everyone while still being convenient.|Thank you for considering my feedback.|Sincerely,
[Your Name]
Sample Score 3
To the Public Works Department,
Thank you for the new bike racks by the library.|I like them.|The problem is their location.|The racks block the walk way, so it is hard for people to walk to the library door.
I have a suggestion for a better location.|You can move the racks to the side of the library building.|There is more space over there and it is not in the way.|Please think about this change.|Thank you,
[Your Name]
TOEFL Writing – Write an Email Scoring Guide
SCORE 5: A fully successful response
The response is effective, is clearly expressed, and shows consistent facility in the use of language.
A typical response displays the following:
- Elaboration that effectively supports the communicative purpose
- Effective syntactic variety and precise, idiomatic word choice
- Consistent use of appropriate social conventions (e.g., politeness, register, organization of information and formulation of actions such as requests, refusals, criticisms, etc.)
- Almost no lexical or grammatical errors other than those expected from a competent writer writing under timed conditions (e.g., common typos or common misspellings or substitutions like there/their)
SCORE 4: A generally successful response
The response is mostly effective and easily understood. Language facility is adequate to the task.
A typical response displays the following:
- Adequate elaboration to support the communicative purpose
- Syntactic variety and appropriate word choice
- Mostly appropriate social conventions
- Few lexical or grammatical errors
SCORE 3: A partially successful response
The response generally accomplishes the task. Limitations in language facility may prevent parts of the message from being fully clear and effective.
A typical response displays the following:
- Elaboration that partially supports the communicative purpose
- A moderate range of syntax and vocabulary
- Some noticeable errors in structure, word forms, use of idiomatic language and/or social conventions
SCORE 2: A mostly unsuccessful response
The response reflects an attempt to address the task, but it is mostly ineffective. The message may be limited or difficult to interpret.
A typical response exhibits one or more of the following:
- Limited or irrelevant elaboration
- Some connected sentence-level language, with a limited range of syntax and vocabulary
- An accumulation of errors in sentence structure and/or language use
SCORE 1: An unsuccessful response
The response reflects an ineffective attempt to address the task. The message may be limited to the point of being unintelligible.
A typical response exhibits one or more of the following:
- Very little elaboration, if any
- Telegraphic language (i.e., short and/or disconnected phrases and sentences) with a very limited range of vocabulary
- Serious and frequent errors in the use of language
- Minimal original language; any coherent language is mostly borrowed from the stimulus
SCORE 0: No response / irrelevant response
The response is blank, rejects the topic, is not in English, is entirely copied from the prompt, is entirely unconnected to the prompt, or consists of arbitrary keystrokes.
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